Hi can you take a look at my new story, I spent weeks writing and rewriting the script can you give your feedback be it positive or negative please ??

Hi can you take a look at my new story, I spent weeks writing and rewriting the script can you give your feedback be it positive or negative please ?? https://www.mycast.io/stories/fantastic-four-249 https://www.mycast.io/stories/king-arthur-95411